Continuing on with creative writing Tip number two . . .
Creative Writing Tips on Action Verbs #2: Active Verbs Grab Attention
Use active verbs rather than passive. Active verbs rivet readers’ attention; passive verbs weaken your writing. Compare:
Kim broke the jar. (Active verb)
The jar was broken by Kim. (Passive verb)
The first example is strong, precise and concise; the second sounds insipid.
The active verb in the first example charges the sentence with a vitality and directness that compels attention. In the second example, however, the passive verb has slowed down the action and made the sentence unnecessarily wordy.